Matt/Callum
Brief is now done.
Artist and genre is better with some examples and some sense of key bands and ideologies. Ideally this could still be more specific but it's certainly better.
Video analysis lacks structure and has issues with expression. It's not formal or specific enough. If you're going to club the videos together then think of sub-categories for comparison such as m/e/c/s and representations. I don't think you're specific enough with the Goodwin terminology.
Overall you need a much clearer explanation of the audience and how their expectations are addressed in the visual style and ideologies of the videos (my discussion with Callum yesterday on gender, hedonism, socio-economic groups and social realism should help)
It's an improvement on last week but I'd like to see some more specific and focused explanation if it's going to qualify as proficient.
C/D
Paolo/William/Bradley/
Brief is now done.
You have structuring problems with your artist and genre research. It's better to integrate the key terms into a unified whole rather than separate them as it runs the risk of incoherence. Remember that the idea is to offer a clear, cogent and informed assessment of the genre and artist and genre. In your case the parts are rather working against the whole.
Ideology section is still unconvincing with grammatical errors. It's still rather thin with a few refernces to songs. There are lapses in expression.
Iconography - expression still very weak e.g 'flashy' , still marked by lazy assumptions and vague points that make little sense, 'cheap colours'??? It is rushed and unconvincing and demonstrates a lack of clarity and understanding of conventions.
Aspirations is also marked by lazy assumptions and is unconvincing.
Materialism sections is irrelevant and indie is also thin.
Video Analysis
1. Still hasn't covered representation of the artists which I think is key. Theory seems uncertain
2. Has this improved at all since my last comments? No ideas on relevance of m/e/c/s to representation of the band or any relevance to the genre/subgenre.
3 Is lengthier but your points are still non-specific.
4. Brief with a few decent points on m/e/c/s although I'd say that the visual amplify rather than contradict.
Overall D
Zak and Harry
Brief is there.
I really like the artist and genre research. It's clear, relevant and specific and uses key terminology.
You could add more lyrical content to highlight points and also use terms such as misogyny for the sexist lyrics but it's good and you can now start thinking how you can present the information more visually. You might also mention a few artists who have also challenged conventions of rap.
Video
Wings : some excellent points on his ideology which relates well to audience and genre in the previous tab.
You might discuss his visual iconography as 'minimalist' and it might help if I watch the video with you to see if there are any specific points on m/e/c/s and representation.
Thrift shop analysis is both relevant and concise. I'd still like examples of groups etc that he's different to in terms of attitudes to materialism and you could still incorporate materialism more closely. Again, it's probably useful to go through this with me.
YOU'RE STILL 2 VIDEOS SHORT
Currently : C
With two more videos : B
With improvements and excellent presentation : A
Dan Niall Liam
Artist and genre research is slightly better with specific references to groups but some of it is still nonsensical and general e.g ' one of his song lyrics mentions about living on the minimal shown through his appearance as he does not wear flashy outfits most artists were more often that not these days.' ?? This makes no sense. I'd like more reference to his lyrics and interviews as evidence for discussing his ideologies. Your points made on this are still brief and unsatisfactory and I'd like more specifics on representation of the artist.
D/E
Videos
There are 4 now rather than 2 which is better. However expression is still vague, 'In the video there is a use of special effects, something that isn't normally done in a regular soft rock video. ' SFX are used in most styles of video, even folk .
You've included some theory. You've included some discussion of m/e/c/s but your terminology is not as strong as it should be. You need to sit down with me and watch these videos again to try and come up with some more relevant and specific points.
Overall : D
Gianluca/Finlegh
Brief is now done.
Artist and genre is better with some examples and some sense of key bands and ideologies. Ideally this could still be more specific but it's certainly better.
Video analysis lacks structure and has issues with expression. It's not formal or specific enough. If you're going to club the videos together then think of sub-categories for comparison such as m/e/c/s and representations. I don't think you're specific enough with the Goodwin terminology.
Overall you need a much clearer explanation of the audience and how their expectations are addressed in the visual style and ideologies of the videos (my discussion with Callum yesterday on gender, hedonism, socio-economic groups and social realism should help)
It's an improvement on last week but I'd like to see some more specific and focused explanation if it's going to qualify as proficient.
C/D
Paolo/William/Bradley/
Brief is now done.
You have structuring problems with your artist and genre research. It's better to integrate the key terms into a unified whole rather than separate them as it runs the risk of incoherence. Remember that the idea is to offer a clear, cogent and informed assessment of the genre and artist and genre. In your case the parts are rather working against the whole.
Ideology section is still unconvincing with grammatical errors. It's still rather thin with a few refernces to songs. There are lapses in expression.
Iconography - expression still very weak e.g 'flashy' , still marked by lazy assumptions and vague points that make little sense, 'cheap colours'??? It is rushed and unconvincing and demonstrates a lack of clarity and understanding of conventions.
Aspirations is also marked by lazy assumptions and is unconvincing.
Materialism sections is irrelevant and indie is also thin.
Video Analysis
1. Still hasn't covered representation of the artists which I think is key. Theory seems uncertain
2. Has this improved at all since my last comments? No ideas on relevance of m/e/c/s to representation of the band or any relevance to the genre/subgenre.
3 Is lengthier but your points are still non-specific.
4. Brief with a few decent points on m/e/c/s although I'd say that the visual amplify rather than contradict.
Overall D
Zak and Harry
Brief is there.
I really like the artist and genre research. It's clear, relevant and specific and uses key terminology.
You could add more lyrical content to highlight points and also use terms such as misogyny for the sexist lyrics but it's good and you can now start thinking how you can present the information more visually. You might also mention a few artists who have also challenged conventions of rap.
Video
Wings : some excellent points on his ideology which relates well to audience and genre in the previous tab.
You might discuss his visual iconography as 'minimalist' and it might help if I watch the video with you to see if there are any specific points on m/e/c/s and representation.
Thrift shop analysis is both relevant and concise. I'd still like examples of groups etc that he's different to in terms of attitudes to materialism and you could still incorporate materialism more closely. Again, it's probably useful to go through this with me.
YOU'RE STILL 2 VIDEOS SHORT
Currently : C
With two more videos : B
With improvements and excellent presentation : A
Dan Niall Liam
Artist and genre research is slightly better with specific references to groups but some of it is still nonsensical and general e.g ' one of his song lyrics mentions about living on the minimal shown through his appearance as he does not wear flashy outfits most artists were more often that not these days.' ?? This makes no sense. I'd like more reference to his lyrics and interviews as evidence for discussing his ideologies. Your points made on this are still brief and unsatisfactory and I'd like more specifics on representation of the artist.
D/E
Videos
There are 4 now rather than 2 which is better. However expression is still vague, 'In the video there is a use of special effects, something that isn't normally done in a regular soft rock video. ' SFX are used in most styles of video, even folk .
You've included some theory. You've included some discussion of m/e/c/s but your terminology is not as strong as it should be. You need to sit down with me and watch these videos again to try and come up with some more relevant and specific points.
Overall : D
Gianluca/Finlegh