Deji's group
Artist and genre is better. I'd still like to hear more specific examples on the genre section on bands and their ideologies. Also when you discuss your group your discussion of hedonistic (use this word) ideology is fine but it's almost entirely based on the one song. Surely you can find another basis i.e look at other lyrics, songs, interviews. Also you have said they're materialistic but there's no evidence of this...if you're going to suggest this then find some.
Videos
Jerk It Out - not bad overall but your use of theory is basic. You have to specify what the theory is and why it applies. E.G lyrics amplify as suggested by...
Leon
some of this makes no sense e.g
'The shot composition helps to suggest that the music video is made by the kings of Leon and th'
other points are often vague and superficial. You need to narrow this down to a key points and have a greater focus on representation
oasis
what does this have to do with visuals????
The video starts off with a calm and soft setting but as the second verse starts, the setting is intensified when the drums and viola enter. This shows a typical feature of the indie rock genre because indie rock music usually starts off relaxed, and then the beat kicks in.
Most of this is not analytical. I can't see any discussion of representation or theory and you're struggling to make any relevant or interesting points
Alt - J
by far the best, most precise and specific - I'd like you to take out a few points and explain how they will have an effect on your own video in an impact section
Finlegh/ Gianluca
I can still see plagiarism on your artist page. If you don't go through and amend all of this I will have to deduct from your final mark e.g The indie rock scene in the US was foreshadowed by the college rock that dominated college radio playlists. This is your second and final warning.
More plagiarism,e.g 'The 1990s brought major changes to the alternative rock scene. Grunge bands such as Nirvana, Pearl Jam, Soundgarden, Hole, and Alice in Chains broke into the mainstream, achieving commercial chart success and widespread exposure.'
Research on the band is often very vague and unspecific, e.g, Going from the unconventional look, being dressed similar ways to 'Oasis' with the "don't care" look to their more recent look where all the band members dress more stylish with Alex Turner- no specific terms or theory used and little relevant detail . You haven't considered representation or ideologies convincingly as yet.
Videos
There are now 4 not two which is an improvement
video 1 has some superficial and vague commentary such as, 'In the shot composition of the bar is dark in the foreground a light in the background. This is very common in the indie genre as many other bands use this style such as Oasis.'
There are some interesting points , for example on voyeurism, but you haven't considered Goodwin and I can't see enough on representation of the artist.
Video 2 :
You're making vague references to Freud but what has this to do with the band? There should be a clear link between what you're deconstructing and your conclusions about the representation of the band and how this will have an impact upon what you do.
Video 3
Vague comments e.g, 'Liam Gallagher the lead vocalist is represented to be laid back, and perhaps in a high state of mind, this is highlighted in the lyrics but '- you are struggling to make any relevant points.
If I were you I'd focus on an early video and a later one and bring out much more clearly how the representations of the band have changed. Oasis and the other group are less relevant.
With plagiarism U
Without D
Artist and genre is better. I'd still like to hear more specific examples on the genre section on bands and their ideologies. Also when you discuss your group your discussion of hedonistic (use this word) ideology is fine but it's almost entirely based on the one song. Surely you can find another basis i.e look at other lyrics, songs, interviews. Also you have said they're materialistic but there's no evidence of this...if you're going to suggest this then find some.
Videos
Jerk It Out - not bad overall but your use of theory is basic. You have to specify what the theory is and why it applies. E.G lyrics amplify as suggested by...
Leon
some of this makes no sense e.g
'The shot composition helps to suggest that the music video is made by the kings of Leon and th'
other points are often vague and superficial. You need to narrow this down to a key points and have a greater focus on representation
oasis
what does this have to do with visuals????
The video starts off with a calm and soft setting but as the second verse starts, the setting is intensified when the drums and viola enter. This shows a typical feature of the indie rock genre because indie rock music usually starts off relaxed, and then the beat kicks in.
Most of this is not analytical. I can't see any discussion of representation or theory and you're struggling to make any relevant or interesting points
Alt - J
by far the best, most precise and specific - I'd like you to take out a few points and explain how they will have an effect on your own video in an impact section
Finlegh/ Gianluca
I can still see plagiarism on your artist page. If you don't go through and amend all of this I will have to deduct from your final mark e.g The indie rock scene in the US was foreshadowed by the college rock that dominated college radio playlists. This is your second and final warning.
More plagiarism,e.g 'The 1990s brought major changes to the alternative rock scene. Grunge bands such as Nirvana, Pearl Jam, Soundgarden, Hole, and Alice in Chains broke into the mainstream, achieving commercial chart success and widespread exposure.'
Research on the band is often very vague and unspecific, e.g, Going from the unconventional look, being dressed similar ways to 'Oasis' with the "don't care" look to their more recent look where all the band members dress more stylish with Alex Turner- no specific terms or theory used and little relevant detail . You haven't considered representation or ideologies convincingly as yet.
Videos
There are now 4 not two which is an improvement
video 1 has some superficial and vague commentary such as, 'In the shot composition of the bar is dark in the foreground a light in the background. This is very common in the indie genre as many other bands use this style such as Oasis.'
There are some interesting points , for example on voyeurism, but you haven't considered Goodwin and I can't see enough on representation of the artist.
Video 2 :
You're making vague references to Freud but what has this to do with the band? There should be a clear link between what you're deconstructing and your conclusions about the representation of the band and how this will have an impact upon what you do.
Video 3
Vague comments e.g, 'Liam Gallagher the lead vocalist is represented to be laid back, and perhaps in a high state of mind, this is highlighted in the lyrics but '- you are struggling to make any relevant points.
If I were you I'd focus on an early video and a later one and bring out much more clearly how the representations of the band have changed. Oasis and the other group are less relevant.
With plagiarism U
Without D