Matt/Callum
Please add your brief to the title page - it's on A2cw.
The artist /genre research is brief and thin. There is little use of any key terms. There are frequent spelling mistakes and some of it is cut and paste. WHy haven't you gone into more depth. As a week's research for two it is inadequate at best. Basic - E Why not discuss what you know about the genre and other artists? His lyrics and beliefs and his audience?
Music Video
Is not on the site - U. Deadline missed completely It needs to be on there today. Again there is zero evidence of any work.
A VERY poor start
Paolo/William/Bradley
PLEASE LISTEN to instructions. No brief on the homepage.
There are some rather messy looking presentations on your artist/genre page. I asked you to simply provide text so they could be changed into an I.T friendly format later.
Artist/Genre
Ideology/ apostrophes? various grammatical errors. Little relevant detail or evidence of any real in depth understanding of genre or artist.
Iconography :poorly expressed with little use of key terms. You know there are marks for communication? e.g 'Indie music is far less flashy'. Few examples of what you're actually discussing and dubious assertions , e.g 'many indie videos are filmed in a film noir style' !?
Aspirations / extremely brief - slightly better expression but again no examples.
What about examples from songs? Discussion of aspects of the genre?
Indie/Materialism : Bradley had cut and paste - has little evidence of any real understanding and has even misspelt his name :
As a whole it's basic, sketchy, lacks evidence of research is full of errors and casual and lazy assumptions, is cut and paste and barely coherent. You are meant to be working together on this to produce a coherent piece of extensive research.
BASIC E
Videos
Radioactive : lacks any relevant application of theory (Goodwin) or of the band's representations - which is crucial. Some consideration of m/e/c/s but lacking in depth.
It's Time : again fails to consider ideologies in depth and crucially has nothing on representation of the band. The ideas aren't there. For instance, why have they selected the post apocalyptic genre?
Demons : what exactly does Goodwin say about 'star image' - be specific - with examples! expression could improve e.g, 'as pop music normally sing about money and girls.' (Overall, slightly better than the others)
Pompeii; some misuse of key terms/ e.g low key lighting/ little sense of a conclusion
Overall : needs theory, better expression, relevance and discussion of representation
D/E Basic
Zak/Harry
Home page : no brief
Artist/Genre : fairly concise but thin. I can't see how this represents a week's work. There isn't much information on the artist, bands in the genre or examples.
BASIC E
Videos
Is not done. Failure to meet deadlines and absence of any work . U
Luca/Deji/Jack/William
No names or brief on home page. LISTEN TO INSTRUCTIONS!
ARTIST/GENRE : Starts reasonably well. Then I found that some expression is simply cut and paste from wikipedia. e.g, 'The main idea of indie rock is to denounce and reject the commercialism of mainstream culture' I expect ALL cut and paste removed/changed!
Plagiarism - U
Videos
Deadline not met. No analyses on site - U
Gianluca/Finleigh
Don't forget to add digipak cover and advert to your homepage brief.
Artist/Genre: mostly cut and paste from wikipedia
U Plagiarism
Videos
Only two : You need a minimum of four.
'In the setting the bar is dark in the foreground a light in the background. This is very common in the indie genre' - this is a vague and fairly random assumption. You need to focus on Goodwin/ representation and ideologies. You could be saying a lot more here about the direction the band are taking.
Ashcroft video seems an inappropriate choice as its disccussed as rock rather than indie.
Dan/Matt/Liam .
Please make sure your full names are on the home page
Artist/Genre : plagiarism , e.g 'with both emerging as...'wikipedia is not acceptable
Little real evidence of research in the form of relevant examples of interviews, lyrics or research into the artist or genre. Points are superficial. For some reason it has been put into a slide format - you were told to simply present the information and concentrate on I.T later. Spelling and grammatical mistakes.
U
Videos
Only two analysed : you were instructed to analyse 4. Failed to meet deadline.
The Fray : is unfinished. There are some grammatical errors. You need to focus on genre conventions, representation of the artist and Goodwin's conventions.
Video 2: analysis is better with some reference to Goodwin but I'd like more. I'd like a closer breakdown of elements of m/e/c/s and how they contribute to the ideologies created and representation of the artist.
U
FYI.
Low grades for effort / deadlines on I.M.
No UCAS Grades (expected) higher than AS unless immediate improvement is evident. Many will be lower.
Parents contacted regarding plagiarism, failure to meet deadlines, poor effort.
No time given up in lessons for filming - all filming to be done in your own free time.
Editing may also have to be done after school if lesson time is not used correctly on planning.
Students to work on Mondays after school in department detentions to complete work if they can work independently.
Expectations
All work checked/updated and improved before Tuesday's lessons. By then all parents will have been informed of the disappointing efforts thus far. If there is no improvement I will immediately set detentions to make up for the inability of some students to work at the expected level. If this also fails to have effect I will begin deducting marks from individuals for their final grade and discuss whether some students are capable of completing the required work and have the necessary skills required to complete the course.
If any individual is struggling they need to see me for help. Additional help will be provided but I also need to see some evidence of effort on the part of each individual student.
Please add your brief to the title page - it's on A2cw.
The artist /genre research is brief and thin. There is little use of any key terms. There are frequent spelling mistakes and some of it is cut and paste. WHy haven't you gone into more depth. As a week's research for two it is inadequate at best. Basic - E Why not discuss what you know about the genre and other artists? His lyrics and beliefs and his audience?
Music Video
Is not on the site - U. Deadline missed completely It needs to be on there today. Again there is zero evidence of any work.
A VERY poor start
Paolo/William/Bradley
PLEASE LISTEN to instructions. No brief on the homepage.
There are some rather messy looking presentations on your artist/genre page. I asked you to simply provide text so they could be changed into an I.T friendly format later.
Artist/Genre
Ideology/ apostrophes? various grammatical errors. Little relevant detail or evidence of any real in depth understanding of genre or artist.
Iconography :poorly expressed with little use of key terms. You know there are marks for communication? e.g 'Indie music is far less flashy'. Few examples of what you're actually discussing and dubious assertions , e.g 'many indie videos are filmed in a film noir style' !?
Aspirations / extremely brief - slightly better expression but again no examples.
What about examples from songs? Discussion of aspects of the genre?
Indie/Materialism : Bradley had cut and paste - has little evidence of any real understanding and has even misspelt his name :
As a whole it's basic, sketchy, lacks evidence of research is full of errors and casual and lazy assumptions, is cut and paste and barely coherent. You are meant to be working together on this to produce a coherent piece of extensive research.
BASIC E
Videos
Radioactive : lacks any relevant application of theory (Goodwin) or of the band's representations - which is crucial. Some consideration of m/e/c/s but lacking in depth.
It's Time : again fails to consider ideologies in depth and crucially has nothing on representation of the band. The ideas aren't there. For instance, why have they selected the post apocalyptic genre?
Demons : what exactly does Goodwin say about 'star image' - be specific - with examples! expression could improve e.g, 'as pop music normally sing about money and girls.' (Overall, slightly better than the others)
Pompeii; some misuse of key terms/ e.g low key lighting/ little sense of a conclusion
Overall : needs theory, better expression, relevance and discussion of representation
D/E Basic
Zak/Harry
Home page : no brief
Artist/Genre : fairly concise but thin. I can't see how this represents a week's work. There isn't much information on the artist, bands in the genre or examples.
BASIC E
Videos
Is not done. Failure to meet deadlines and absence of any work . U
Luca/Deji/Jack/William
No names or brief on home page. LISTEN TO INSTRUCTIONS!
ARTIST/GENRE : Starts reasonably well. Then I found that some expression is simply cut and paste from wikipedia. e.g, 'The main idea of indie rock is to denounce and reject the commercialism of mainstream culture' I expect ALL cut and paste removed/changed!
Plagiarism - U
Videos
Deadline not met. No analyses on site - U
Gianluca/Finleigh
Don't forget to add digipak cover and advert to your homepage brief.
Artist/Genre: mostly cut and paste from wikipedia
U Plagiarism
Videos
Only two : You need a minimum of four.
'In the setting the bar is dark in the foreground a light in the background. This is very common in the indie genre' - this is a vague and fairly random assumption. You need to focus on Goodwin/ representation and ideologies. You could be saying a lot more here about the direction the band are taking.
Ashcroft video seems an inappropriate choice as its disccussed as rock rather than indie.
Dan/Matt/Liam .
Please make sure your full names are on the home page
Artist/Genre : plagiarism , e.g 'with both emerging as...'wikipedia is not acceptable
Little real evidence of research in the form of relevant examples of interviews, lyrics or research into the artist or genre. Points are superficial. For some reason it has been put into a slide format - you were told to simply present the information and concentrate on I.T later. Spelling and grammatical mistakes.
U
Videos
Only two analysed : you were instructed to analyse 4. Failed to meet deadline.
The Fray : is unfinished. There are some grammatical errors. You need to focus on genre conventions, representation of the artist and Goodwin's conventions.
Video 2: analysis is better with some reference to Goodwin but I'd like more. I'd like a closer breakdown of elements of m/e/c/s and how they contribute to the ideologies created and representation of the artist.
U
FYI.
Low grades for effort / deadlines on I.M.
No UCAS Grades (expected) higher than AS unless immediate improvement is evident. Many will be lower.
Parents contacted regarding plagiarism, failure to meet deadlines, poor effort.
No time given up in lessons for filming - all filming to be done in your own free time.
Editing may also have to be done after school if lesson time is not used correctly on planning.
Students to work on Mondays after school in department detentions to complete work if they can work independently.
Expectations
All work checked/updated and improved before Tuesday's lessons. By then all parents will have been informed of the disappointing efforts thus far. If there is no improvement I will immediately set detentions to make up for the inability of some students to work at the expected level. If this also fails to have effect I will begin deducting marks from individuals for their final grade and discuss whether some students are capable of completing the required work and have the necessary skills required to complete the course.
If any individual is struggling they need to see me for help. Additional help will be provided but I also need to see some evidence of effort on the part of each individual student.